12年6月英语四级作文解析
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题目：On Excessive Packaging
提纲：
1. 目前很多商品存在过度包装现象
2. 出现这一现象的原因
3. 我对这一现象的看法和建议
一，首段：现象描述（定义法）
从现象的定义来展开论述。现象解释型是四级命题组给予此类话题的统称。现象根据百度百科以及社会认同，可定义为：事物在发生、发展、变化过程中所表现的内在联系性和客观形式。人们或接受或抵制。由此，无论你拿到什么话题，可点出此现象的发展性，与人们对其的态度--抵制/争议/接受。课上我们强调了诸多表示发展性以及人们观点的表达词。
With the rapid advancement of society, numerous social conflicts thrive like mushrooms after the rain. The one that sparks intense and severe resistance is excessive packaging.
It is generally recognized that the real world is a complex being filled with controversies, thus
unavoidably we, as the inhabitants on the earth, are most likely to encounter infinite stuff against our good will. The typical one is excessive packaging.
社会是个纷繁复杂体，作为社会的一员，必然会遇到逆我心意之事，其中之一就是。。。点出现象后，还可用上科学数据法来支撑你的观点，点出此现象的普遍性。
According to the survey conducted by Relevant Department/ Xinhua News Agency, the past 10 years has witnessed an astonishing rise in the kind of excessive packaged commodities from 3,400 to 790,900.
也可用课堂上强调过的举出实际例子的方式。如果举不出例子，课上也强调过规避弱点的方法，如 There are too many examples to mention one by one. 太多的例子不胜枚举。
二段：原因分析
课上我们强调过考前构思框架的重要性。何谓框架。就是英语逻辑层次表达。以前，同学们可能使用 firstly,secondly,thirdly。可往往落入模板的俗套，或者表达不出更加深刻的效果。若将第一等同于直接原因，亦或是各行各业人们都公认了的最重要的原因，这样一来不但表达出第一个原因的重要性，也用上了一些加分句型来翻译此句话。
原因框架构建如下：
Initially,…, which is universally confirmed by the masses. 首先，。。。这得到公众一致认可。
The second reason, under no circumstance should we neglect, is that... 不容忽视的第二个原因
The third reason, which may be partially true, is that…一个有争议的原因是。。。
中间的细节补充，课上我也重点提到了常见四六级原因的英语表达，此处针对此话题，可用
1. 生产商对利益的热切追求，将其视为有效投资。Fix on profit/ profitable investment/ in the pursuit of sth zealously/money-oriented salespeople
2. 商家迫于竞争压力。 Smothered by the fierce competition/competition exists everywhere
3. 从消费市场的需求考虑，某些消费者意识淡薄，倾向于购买包装精美的商品，盲目跟风。the low level of awareness on Sth / blindly follow suit
4.市场监督不力，商品过度包装，要价与实际产值不符合。Supervisory authorities/ inadequate legal and regulatory footing
由此，将常见原因分析出，加入原因框架，可轻松写出文章：
Initially，money-oriented manufacturers consider excessive packaging as a profitable investment, which is universally confirmed by the masses. Consumers can be easily drawn to those well-designed and well-packaged commodities. The second reason, under no circumstance should we neglect, is thatmanufactures are smothered by the fierce competition which drives them to find a way out. In the eyes of those businessmen, excessive packaging is regarded as a judicious choice. The third reason, which may be partially true, is that inefficient supervision facilitates the expanding process of excessive packaging.
三 尾段：建议
建议逻辑的观点表达： 1， 前提是 the prerequisite is … 2. 另一个可行方案是 Another feasible method is… 3. 万灵药/ 对症下药 The panacea to this issue is that ..
常见建议表达，这对此话题，可选出：
1. 从源头治理。 2. 加强社会，政府监督管理。 3. 消费者提升意识。 4. 宣传曝光过度包装的危害
In no circumstance can excessive packaging allow bargain. One feasible method is that we should attack it from the source. Supervisory authorities should strengthen supervision, providing our costumers a sound consuming market. Perhaps the panacea to this issue is that we can advocate and encourage our friends, relatives and acquaintances to buy goods without excessive packages. Just as the saying goes: "when everybody adds fuel, the flames rise high."
此篇文章，所用方法只是课上内容的冰山一角。首段还可用上：提问法，设问法，问题普遍性法，客观法，谚语引用法。文章高分提升可用上: 万能插入语，万能同位语和万能熟语等。
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